Focus
The discussion in the sample essay “The Jewelry” is substantial. The writer did a great job as the theme of the story is revealed and the discussion is focused. Moreover, the writer managed to present the theme of the story in the introduction having involved it is the creation of the thesis statement. The thesis statement is concise and clear, however, it seems to me that the thesis statement is too precise.
Stating that the author refers to the symbolism, diction, characterization, and subtle allegory, the writer had to mention the examples which are going to be referred to. Therefore, the thesis statement reveals the main idea of the discussion which refers to the theme of the story under consideration, however, it lacks the details which may make the thesis statement stronger and better for perception.
Development
Even though the thesis statement is not explained as it should be, the information in the whole paper follows the thesis. The author explains in detail which symbols are used in the story and how they are useful for understanding the main idea of the theme. The writer also specifies the diction, characterization, and subtle allegory met in the story to make sure that the reader of the essay can understand the theme correctly.
Moreover, the detailed description of the theme is supported by the detailed reference to the text which helps the reader to see the whole picture and make sure that the role of the wife as the “silent participant in the story” is properly understood. The author applies the direct quotes that show the close reading of the text, as some of the quotes are not the phrases, but the words and word combinations used for making the argumentation of the writer’s ideas stronger.
Organization
Each of the paragraphs presented in the paper is the consideration of the separate symbol and the reference of this symbol to the theme of the discussion. Thus, starting with the theater as the representation of the place where the wife meets with her lover, the author refers to the false jewelry which is the reference to lying. The writer of the essay tries to offer arguments to support his/her consideration and the close reading of the text is extremely useful in this case.
Utilizing the direct quotes which may be easily substituted by paraphrases, the writer wants to make sure that those who have not read the story yet can easily understand what is the problem and how it is presented in the original writing. Additionally, the paper structure is supported by the introduction and the conclusion which sum up the information.
Language, Syntax, and General Mechanics
Dwelling upon the characters and their role in revealing the main idea of the story, the writer tries to speak as if from the side of the author. Using such expressions as “Maupassant presents” and “Maupassant uses” the writer tries to speak from the author’s part. The language in the paper is simple, without complicated terminology and specific words. The syntax and mechanics in the essay correspond to the college writing level.
Overall Comments
Therefore, it may be concluded that the sample essay is written in accordance with the rules of writing papers. The structure, theme, and other specific issues are followed. The writer of the essay managed to present a strong thesis statement and to make sure that the thesis statement is dwelt upon through the paper.