First Draft for Luigi: From The Hound of the Baskervilles
This brilliant draft skillfully develops a very interesting idea on why Sir Arthur Conan Doyle’s The Hound of the Baskervilles is so popular among readers. The idea is in a remarkable harmony of the two main protagonists’ images. The writer adroitly discusses a number of convincing points that explain why Holmes’ and Watson’s characters are so effective in their combination. The evidences shown in the argument of this paper are very strong, and can be hardly called into question. Among the most effective arguments, I would mention: “Watson’s down-to-earth personality allows Holmes’ brilliance to shine through”, and “Doyle has created a “mentor/mentee” relationship which helps to carry the story along” (“First Draft” 1). These arguments are very convincing, just like the sub-arguments that are developed below with the purpose of supporting and developing the offered ideas. Of course, the above quoted thoughts are not the only ‘precious gems’ in the writers treasury this time. Also, the argument regarding the effectiveness of the two images is well-supported by the fact that through the use of varied approaches, the trivial one by Watson, and the sophisticated one by Holmes, the readers acquire a chance to have their own vision of the committed crime as they have an option to chose what facts and evidences, and what kinds of their interpretations to believe. Thus, each reader may have one’s own interpretation of the written text that is based on his or her own vision and preferences. As a result, this piece of literature can be seen as the one having a special success among the wide public on the reason of its multidimensional approach to interpreting the events that are taking place during the development of the story plot. Finally, the argument that Watson’s character is very important in this detective story as it offers contrast and makes Holmes’ dryness diluted appears to be an incredible finishing touch in this essay.
Overall, the impression that the paper produces is more than great because it is even difficult to suggest the writer some more ideas on how to develop his central thought about the two complementary characters that make Conan Doyle’s book so appealing to the audience. Perhaps, I could only offer the writer to mention a particular example in the story when Watson demonstrates his down-to-earth way of thinking, and Holmes identifies himself as an ingenious master of exalted detective thought so that the readers could deepen their understanding of the writer’s vision. I also think, it may be even more convincing for the readers if the writer would be able to find the exact quotations from Conan Doyle’s text when Holmes’ saying is remarkably higher in its ideological coloration than Watson’s one. Finally, I would also want to thank the writer for his great writing style because the ideas are developed by means of expressions, constructions, and terms of remarkable beauty and precision.
Second Draft for Ashley: From The Texts The Hound of the Baskervilles by Sir Arthur Conan Doyle, and Harry Potter and the Philosopher’s Stone by J.K. Rowling
The second draft is remarkable for its structure that makes reading through its ideas and grasping their scope very convenient and easy. This feature seems to be the strongest factor that makes it rather successful.
Reading through the paper’s argument, the first idea that catches my attention is “The texts The Hound of the Baskervilles written by Sir Arthur Conan Doyle, and Harry Potter and the Philosopher’s Stone written by J.K. Rowling, both revolve around primary characters that are seriously flawed individuals” (“Second Draft” 2). This idea is not easy to agree with as the majority of readers, including me, would state that brilliantly developed characters of Sherlock Holmes and Harry Potter are the most important factors, which make the pieces of literature where they are described, real masterpieces of word. Nevertheless, as the writer of the paper has a different vision of Holmes’ and Potter’s personalities, it is not a reason to state that his work is irrelevant; on the contrary, there is a great probability that there may be more readers who have similar opinion. Anyway, the idea that Holmes’ and Potter’s personalities are flawed is very effective in catching the reader’s attention, and heating their interest to encourage reading the paper to the very end.
When the writer mentions particular reasons why he sees Holmes and Potter as “character[s] that [are] infused with many weaknesses” in the section “arguments”, I (and I believe, the other readers) have the only question “can you explain this?!” (“Second Draft” 2). The writer calls Holmes “a serious drug abuser”, and Potter “a sanctimonious, insecure and metaphorically blind individual” (“Second Draft” 2). These statements are rather daring; on this reason, I believe, they should be supported by the quotations from the text, and their explanations. Of course, there is nothing wrong in expressing one’s thoughts openly even if they are that unconventional, but any writer who describes one’s vision of an object or a person, that are traditionally seen in a different way, should offer serious facts providing the grounds to assume that they may be right when they make such suppositions.
Next, the section of the paper, where the settings of the two literature works are described, is excellent. It really offers more details that help understand Holmes’ and Potter’s personalities in a better way. It is difficult to offer any other ways on how to add to the development of this section. Similar conclusions can be made regarding the following section that is called “thematic development”. This section offers interesting arguments that explain why both Holmes and Potter are triumphant in the end.
Overall, this draft can be seen as featuring a number of remarkable peculiarities that would not leave any reader without bright emotions. First of all, I really appreciate the development and the logic of this paper that provide it with significant level of coherence and cohesiveness. The subheadings are chosen in accordance to good traditions of critical analysis that makes it easy to comprehend what the author is trying to say in this paper. Next, the paper features a great number of unconventional ideas and unusual perceptions. It is hardly possible to find any better way to arrest the readers’ attention so well. As the writer has a different vision of what the majority believes to be white rather than black, his work catches attention for 100 %. The only moment I would like the writer to add when he develops such unusual vision is the exact explanation from the text along with his comments on why he interprets these parts of the text in this or that way.
References
“First Draft for Luigi”. Course Materials (2012): 1. Print.
“Second Draft for Ashley”. Course Materials (2012): 2, 3. Print.