Introduction
The examined introduction and literature review provide numerous valuable insights into the problem of obesity. I believe that the greatest strength of the paper is the large number of analyzed sources and the accurate identification of relevant themes. However, I noticed that while the introduction describes the theory of goal attainment proposed by Imogene King, the literature review does not elaborate on the topic and focuses specifically on obesity management.
Main body
I would like to see a more described connection between the goal attainment theory and obesity. For instance, the doctoral dissertation by Ezenwugo (2021) concentrates on a clinical experiment on how to mitigate the problem of being overweight, using Imogene King’s theory as a theoretical background. It is also possible to find helpful information in articles that focus on general health outcomes via the goal attainment model. For example, Zhu et al. (2023) discuss how patient-nurse collaboration and goal-oriented approach have a positive impact on the health status of people with coronary heart disease, many of whom are overweight. Therefore, I believe that adding more keywords, such as “goal attainment” and “Imogene King,” might be beneficial for the project because it specifies the theory introduced in the paper.
Conclusion
Lastly, while I think that incorporating many credible articles from various sources is a great idea, it is essential to focus on some particular topics more. For instance, since the introduction concentrates on obesity management frameworks with active nurse involvement, it is more significant to examine research related to weight loss strategies via patient-practitioner relationships. Some of the analyzed sources in the literature review confirm the high effectiveness of controlled and goal-oriented programs compared to self-monitored approaches. I think it might be more beneficial for the project to focus on these articles more to find the exact causes of health improvement.
References
Ezenwugo, T. E. (2021). Improving Overweight and Obesity in a Primary Care Setting: A Quality Improvement Project (Doctoral dissertation, Grand Canyon University).
Zhu, X., Yang, Y., & Cao, M. (2023). Effect of a mutual goal‐based continuous care program on self‐management behavior and health outcomes in patients after percutaneous coronary intervention: A randomized controlled trial. Nursing Open, 0(0), 1-12. Web.